Attitude I am really unsure about having to take an English composition course because I am not a writer and the field I am studying for is not one that I would have to write for. I am going to put my all into completing this course to the best of my ability. My plan is to be able to strike a good balance between this class and others that are more in line with my field of study. My hope is that I do not get an apathetic attitude towards the course as the curriculum goes on. Inventory Working through the inventory, I realized that there are things I need to work on to become a better writer.
It also showed me that being able to write well will be important in the future. As a writer, I want to improve my ability to come up with ideas and express my thoughts intelligently. I also would like to be able to pay better attention to grammar so that others can understand what I am writing. Prewriting Positives: Get more done Stay in touch with family and friends in many ways Keep up with what’s going on in the world Able to learn a lot about things I never would have without it Research can be done at one place Save time by doing things online that I normally had to leave home for
Negatives: Waste too much time sometimes People can find me that I don’t want to find me Lose the benefits of face-to-face contact Working Thesis: Computers have had such a profound effect on the way we live our everyday lives that it has completely changed the way we communicate with our friends and family. Drafting Computers have had such a profound effect on the way we live our everyday lives that it has completely changed the way we communicate with our friends and family. Long gone are the days when we could only pick up the phone or write a letter that would take days to deliver.
Computers now give us the ability to instantly get in touch with anybody we want. With social networking sites such as Facebook, we can keep all our friends updated real-time with status updates and other information without ever actually talking to them. With email, we can send private messages to each other instantly, rather than calling on the phone or hand-writing and sending a letter. With instant messengers such as AOL Instant Messenger, we can have real-time conversations with friends and family, as if we were talking on the phone or sitting next to each other.
Revising Purpose and Audience: The purpose and audience of this essay seem to be clear. The writer wants to encourage grandchildren to actually write to their grandparents instead of sending them emails and instant messages. The writer explains that to a grandparent, being able to actually handle and use their senses with a letter or mailed picture can be so much more satisfying than simply receiving a message on a computer. When a person writes a letter or draws a picture, things seem so much more personalized than seeing the email format with emoticons and different fonts.
There is something to be said for recognizing a person’s handwriting and seeing the effort a person put into his or her communication. Thesis statement, topic sentences, paragraphs This essay needs a lot of work in these areas. The thesis statement is almost non-existent. The first sentence of the essay hints at one, but is more of a command than a proposal of an idea. The writer should have used something like: In today’s fast-paced world, technology sometimes gets in the way of the important things in life, like the joy grandparents can get when they get hand-written letters and crayone-drawn pictures from their grandchildren.
The topic sentences are somewhat better, but still a little too blunt. I would expand on them a little to make the essay more pleasurable. The sentence “A letter gives your grandparents the real thing,” could be revised as follows: By hand-writing and sending a letter to your grandparents, you are sending them something tangible that has a very personal piece of you attached that they can’t see in an email. The paragraphs are also very choppy and need to be revised to flow much better. Evidence The evidence used in this essay is good, but the writer does seem to be putting words in grandparents’ mouths.
While it may be true that most grandparents would prefer a written letter or crayon-drawn picture, how does the writer know this for a fact? He or she needs to back this up with some kind of proof. Is there a survey of grandparents somewhere that backs this up? Perhaps the writer should do a survey of grandparents and report the results to back up the evidence. Organization While the essay does seem to be in good logical order, it definitely still needs some revision. There don’t seem to be any transitions used in the essay which can easily confuse a reader.
Ideas seem to run together and the paper becomes chaotic, especially towards the end when the writer talks about the “mass destruction” a wrong click can cause. Use of transitions will definitely make this essay more readable. Narration I. Scene a. My apartment b. Grocery store (job) c. School i. Classrooms ii. Professor offices iii. Fraternity meetings II. Key Actions a. Partying too much b. Working too much c. Procrastinating school work d. Moving back with parents III. Key Participants a. Self b. Friends c. Parents d. Grocery Store Manager e. Professors IV. Key Lines of Dialogue . To store manager: I need to work less hours to keep up with schoolwork b. To friends: I only work weekends now, so I can go out every night! (after getting work hours cut) c. To parents: Things are great here, but I’m out of money d. To professors: I work odd hours so it’s hard for me to get my work done (after getting work hours cut) e. Parents to me: Move home and get yourself under control and figure out where you want to go. Don’t waste another minute at school doing what you’re doing V. Feelings a. About work: Didn’t care.
It was extra spending money as I had loans and money from parents b. About school: In my mind I knew I had to right myself, but I wanted to have fun at the expense of everything else c. About parents: Thought they were crazy to demand I move back home. I knew I just had to put my mind to school, they knew that I wouldn’t be able too. They were right in the end. Description Sight – The entire classroom of more than 50 people focused on me Off-white colored walls Sound – Buzzing lights, Papers shuffling Smell – Neutral in the room Coffee on my breath
Taste – A coffee aftertaste Peppermint BreathSaver Touch – Palms were sweaty Speaking notes very thin Comparison: My palms were like a sponge just after a round of dishes. The easiest sense to write details for was sight. I can still see everyone’s faces staring at me to this day and the color of the walls stands out because I can also still see the almost yellow backdrop. The most difficult was smell. It was about 9 a. m. in a classroom and there were no real smells about it. I had to dig to really think of anything I could smell. Illustration Feelings and Situations:
Overwhelmed – On days where most or all the different aspects of the balancing act come into play, such as a day where I had to work, study for a test, take care of a personal issue and decide whether or not to participate in a social event, I could feel really bogged down. It seemed like I was never going to get everything done. My mind would go in so many different directions that it was hard to focus on one task at a time. Accomplished – No matter how overwhelmed I got, I always felt like I accomplished something good at the end of the day if I was able to fit everything in.
Sometimes even the smallest tasks seemed like monumental chores. At the end of the day, however, I always felt really good about getting done what needed to be done. Rushed – Sometimes trying to balance things caused me to unnecessarily rush things. I began to realize that when I rushed, I would make more mistakes. It didn’t take long before I realized that no matter how hectic things got, I needed to take a deep breath and focus on one thing at a time as much as possible. Needy Exhausted Grown-up Organized Needed Tense Stressed Thesis:
Balancing school, work, relationships and personal matters can be a very tall task for Penn Foster students. But, by remembering to try to relax and rush as little as possible, everyone can get a better balance and get more things done successfully than they ever thought. Comparison and Contrast My experiences with my doctor are always very pleasant as he always seems to be genuinely concerned. Even though I’m sure he has a lot of patients, he always remembers details about my prior visits, what we talked about and personal things about me that he couldn’t get from simply reviewing a chart.
I always felt very welcomed there and was very trusting of him. Even though I live clear on the other side of town from his office, I still make my appointments there. I don’t know that I could feel as comfortable with another doctor. As far as comparisons to the interns in the article, my doctor seems to compare more favorably to the male. Everything seemed very neat and organized with him. He was very well dressed and when he walks in there is a calm about him. He does not have a bunch of papers scattered about and seems to do everything he needs to do from the few notes he has about me in a single folder.
His demeanor leads me to believe he leaves his work at the office and enjoys his life outside of it. Outside of knowing that he does care very much for his patients, he seems to be a stark contrast to the female intern. I get the sense that he never gets in a rush. While a sudden bad turn in a patient’s health may affect him emotionally, he does not let that get in the way of his life. He knows those things are part of being a doctor and that nobody is going to live or even be well forever. For that, he seems to be more able to adjust to different situations than the female.
Classification and Division Reasons Students Are Tempted to Cheat in College Courses Stress • Some students get stressed over what an assignment looks like from the get-go and feel they cannot get it done before they even start • Some students cannot find the material they need to get the assignment done • Sometimes the desire to keep grades up supersedes morality Peer Pressure • Competition among students can lead some to cheating to keep pace • Students may feel left out or less adequate if their grades are not as good as their peers Apathy Some courses may seem less important than others and cheating seems to be an easy way out • Some students simply do not care in general about their education Definition What is cheating? By definition, to cheat is “to influence or lead by deceit, trick, or artiface. ” (Mirriam Webster). The word comes from the 15th century French word “escheat” which first was first used when property went to the state when there was no heir. It later evolved to mean “confiscate” in the middle of the century and by the 1580s meant “to deprive unfairly”.
To cheat in its current meaning when it comes to family means to use lies and deceit to either hide something from loved ones or “trick” them into acts that the cheater desires. To cheat can lead to sleepless, guilt filled nights for the cheater and knots in the stomach of those that have been cheated on. Sexual infidelity is not the only form of cheating. Hiding financial burdens, lying to a mate about where you are can also be considered cheating. Cheating is an act of a coward and being caught in the act generally will bring shame on the cheater. Argument
The sale of human organs is an issue raised in two articles, “How Much Is the Kidney in the Window,” by Bruce Gottlieb, and “Strip-Mining the Dead,” by Gilbert Meilaender. In his article, Gottlieb seems to take the stance that saving a human life is the more important issue here. Lives can be saved and hospitals, in turn can save money with more organs readily available. Being able to transplant organs, he says, is much more cost-effective than keeping a person alive by “artificial” means such as dialysis. To him, this is not a moral issue, but one of practicality and saving lives.
Meilaender on the other hand, sees this as a moral issue. He feels the human body should not be desecrated no matter whose life it may save. He realizes that with his values, many people would die sooner than they normally would if they were to be able to get transplants. To him, the organs should not be for sale and the body not considered a commodity. React There are many sides to every situation. With this one, I feel torn between the two. For one, many people become organ donors by choice. To them, their bodies are there to help others in the case that they are no longer living.
Others choose not to be donors. I personally am a donor but would never frown upon people that did not wish that on their own bodies. There is also the highly moral side to this, such as Meilaender took. To him, no human body should be treated this way and there is no choice to be made. But what of the suffering people whose very lives depend on a short supply of organs? Are they supposed to simply be left for dead? In most cases, they did not ask to be in the conditions they are in and we cannot ignore that fact.
In the end, I feel like organ donation is a personal choice that everyone should make and the decision should be honored. I think the declaration should be something official and if there is no declaration, then the organs should be available for use if the need arises. Yes, I agree with respecting the bodies of those who claim they want that respect in the end. But to save the lives of people who still have a chance to live a happy life, I say anyone else’s body should be available to use if the need arises. Web Site Evaluation
In looking for a higher paying job in the information technology field, I found that I enjoyed working with CareerBuilder. com the most. CareerBuilder seems to be much more optimized, giving me many options that The Riley Guide does not. CareerBuilder’s reputation, at least to me, stands out more as I hear more about it by word-of-mouth than The Riley Guide. Overall, CareerBuilder just seems much easier to read and navigate. It also has some filtering capabilities that The Riley Guide either does not have or are not easily found.
CareerBuilder is much more organized than The Riley Guide. Everything is very well lined up and tabular. Drop-down and combo boxes make it easy for me to see everything being presented in a nutshell. They also allow me to get rid of things I do not want to see. The Riley Guide seems pretty confusing as the front end of the site looks very scattered and chaotic. In terms of organization, CareerBuilder is in a different class to me than The Riley Guide. CareerBuilder has a very large database and it is filterable in so many ways.
On the front page of the site, you can enter your career field and location and the site will generate openings for you right off the bat. Once those search results come up, you can then further filter down by city, company name and other categories. This goes a long way in making the search more manageable. The results also show the distance from the chosen location the job is. This is very helpful when the commute length is a consideration. If you are unsure of what to look for, CareerBuilder offers many niceties that can help push someone along the job search.
If you are not sure what job you are looking for, you can try the Career Test to see what might be up your alley. If what you are going to do is not as big a concern of the amount of money you can make, there is a salary calculator that will show only jobs within your requirements. This list is also filterable. Features like these make CareerBuilder. com actually fun to use. CareerBuilder. com is an overall easy to use, aesthetically pleasing site. Along with all its technical features to help the search, it also lends a helping hand to job seekers by providing very insightful articles about job searching.
The articles cover everything from how to negotiate a higher salary to how to prepare for interview questions. While The Riley Guide does offer a lot of these capabilities, CareerBuilder is definitely the way I would go when doing a job search. It is just much cleaner and easier to navigate. Notes and Citations The article “Why Should I Hire You? ” posted on CareerBuilder. com aims to help interviewees better answer the title question when an interviewer asks it. The author explains that many job candidates simply do not know how to answer this question and get passed over for a position because of it.
He gives some advice about how to answer three different types of concerns from a possible employer: one in which the interviewer thinks the interviewee is not qualified enough, is overqualified or does not have relevant experience. He notes that all experience, no matter what the past job, is relevant but it is up to the candidate to show that the experience would help them in the job he or she is interviewing for. He ends the article by hinting that, in the absence of meeting all the requirements for a job, confidence is a key when he mentions Sharon Gavanditti.
She knew she did not completely qualify for the job, but when the interviewer asked why she should hire her, Sharon said “If you don’t hire me, your competition will. ” It worked and she was hired (2009). APA: Balderamma, A. (2009). Why should I hire you? How to give the right answer to doubtful employers. Retrieved November 16, 2010, from http://www. careerbuilder. com/ Article/CB-1274-Getting-Hired-Why-Should-I-Hire-You/ MLA Balderamma, Anthony. “Why should I hire you? How to give the right answer to doubtful Employers”.
CareerBuilder. com 23 Jun. 2009. Reflect and Evaluate Reflect: At first, I did not really want to take this course as I saw no real need for it. I was not a writer, but considered myself someone who could write well. For the field I was going in, I did not think I would need more than I already knew. In a way the course seemed like it was going to be a waste of my time. I only hoped that I could stay focused on it without stressing too much over my program specific studies. As time went on however, I began to enjoy the course.
I am a very tactile, hands-on learner who likes to see things and learn by doing. By putting me in the position to have to write about different subjects and think about subjects in different ways, it allowed me to expand my mind and broaden my writing capabilities. In a way, the course has made me a deeper thinker than I used to be. I also think about things such as senses a little more when I read. While I always felt I could write very well, I did not really have a sense of a proper process of writing. There is more to it than writing and proofreading a rough draft as I thought before.
Prewriting has allowed me to write a final paper much more easily because the thoughts and ideas are already there and I just have to articulate them. This allows me more time to proofread and check my facts. It also gives me some breathing room near deadline time. Evaluate: I am very happy with this course. Although I already considered myself a decent writer, it taught me that there was more to it than I thought. If I thought about writing the right way, I could more easily get into a good flow and come out with better work.
The things I learned will definitely help me in the future, no matter what field I get into. I think I severely underestimated the value of writing before taking this class. Most of the materials for the course were very helpful. Though, at times, I did find myself getting a little confused. For instance, the MLA formatting that the text book put out did not seem to ring a bell with me, though I may have been wrong in my thinking in the first place. I also thought that the assignments, especially the journal entries could have been a little more in depth.